Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Failed log/April 2022
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- The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The list was archived by The Rambling Man via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 29 April 2022 (UTC) [1].[reply]
- Nominator(s): ISD (talk) 07:35, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Having recently promoted the List of Yuri on Ice episodes to FL, I thought I would use what I have learned during the previous nomination to promote another list of anime episodes to FL as well. I have tried my best to follow the same guidelines with this list, having added a considerable amount of information to it recently. I just hope that this time the process, whether the list gets promoted or not, takes less than five months. ISD (talk) 07:35, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Drive-by comment
- Some/all of the episode descriptions are identical to those on this other Wiki. Were they copied from there to here? From here to there? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:57, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: I've had a look at their history pages, I think the Wikipedia list came first (here to there), as I can see episode descriptions here before the creation of such articles in the Angelic Layer Wiki which only dates back to September 2015. ISD (talk) 10:13, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I'd suggest rewriting the summaries from a more neutral point of view.Tintor2 (talk) 02:02, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- OK. Should I withdraw the nomination for now while I do this, or leave it here? ISD (talk) 08:09, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I would definitely suggest that at least some of the summaries need rewriting. Sentences like "Who will claim victory in this epic battle of the ages?" sound like something that would be included in the blurb on the back of a DVD, but for an encyclopedia they need to be more of a straightforward statement of facts i.e. this happens, then this happens, then this happens. Hope that makes sense -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 16:33, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- OK. Should I withdraw the nomination for now while I do this, or leave it here? ISD (talk) 08:09, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I'd suggest rewriting the summaries from a more neutral point of view.Tintor2 (talk) 02:02, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: I've had a look at their history pages, I think the Wikipedia list came first (here to there), as I can see episode descriptions here before the creation of such articles in the Angelic Layer Wiki which only dates back to September 2015. ISD (talk) 10:13, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- OK. This may take me a while, but I'll see what I can do. ISD (talk) 19:41, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Tables need captions, which allow screen reader software to jump straight to named tables without having to read out all of the text before it each time. Visual captions can be added by putting
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Comments from TRM
[edit]- Could create a plausible redirect at Battle Doll: Angelic Layer to this list.
- "fight using dolls. Misaki enters professional" merge: "fight using dolls and enters professional"
- "The cover of the Angelic Layer collector's edition from Anime Limited." that's a fragment, no full stop.
- "opening theme is " is this the theme song? Why is this more significant than a plot synopsis??
- The source says "ending theme" and has "Ame Agari" rather than "After the rain" (which I guess could be the translation, but for consistency, shouldn't that be "After The Rain"?)
- I would link Blu-ray.
- "In 2001, Angelic Layer won the "Television Award" in the 6th Animation Kobe awards.[12]" I would avoid single-sentence paras.
- Don't use "#" to represent "Number" or "No.", it's an abuse of MOS:HASH.
- "Original Air Date" -> Original air date.
- English Title -> English title.
- " Hikaru..."" please visit MOS:ELLIPSIS here for how to use non-breaking spaces appropriately.
- "can't"/"won't" etc, avoid contractions.
That's enough for a first pass right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:04, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Review by Gerald Waldo Luis
[edit]Hey! I have a few comments that can hopefully polish it more. After all are resolved I'll support this FLC GeraldWL 08:13, 20 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- The image caption: "The cover of the Angelic Layer collector's edition from Anime Limited." The can be removed as it is not typically seen in sentence fragments like this. I think it should also mention "DVD", since collector's edition can be in any medium.
- For "Vol.", I think it must be put inside an abbr template.
- Why is there no references in the "Japanese-language releases", but there are several for "English-language releases"?
- The "References" can be switched with Template:Refh.
- In the ADV Films citations, it always starts with "Angelic Layer »" The » is a script-language variant for italics/apostrophe, so I think you must replace that with italics, so it'll be "Angelic Layer"
- "by Clamp" --> "by the group Clamp"
- "Character design was by" --> "The characters were designed by" to avoid abstract banality in the prose
- "The series first premiered on TV Tokyo on April 1, 2001, and finished on September 23, 2001" --> "The series' first episode premiered on TV Tokyo on April 1, 2001, and the finale episode aired on September 23, 2001"
- "with a total of 26 episdes"-- typo
- You capitalize HAL here, but the band's article uses Hal.
- "by HAL" --> "by the band HAL"
- "the second ending theme is "After the rain" by Moeko Matsushita." You sure it shouldn't be "After the Rain"?
- Overall, I think the sentence about the theme songs can be merged with the first paragraph (after character design), and the TV Tokyo sentence can be merged with the following paragraph as first the sentence.
- Link DVD and Blu-ray, and limited edition
- "The series was then released"-- remove "then" here to avoid repetition
- "released a Blu-ray collection" --> "released a Blu-ray collector's edition"
- The episodes summary can be entirely reworked. It's mostly a synopsis teaser than an actual start-to-finish summary. The wording style is also very fan-like instead of encyclopedic.
@ISD: Are you still pursuing this nomination? --PresN 20:26, 20 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- @PresN: No. Feel free to remove this nomination. ISD (talk) 07:12, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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The list was archived by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 21 April 2022 (UTC) [2].[reply]
- Nominator(s): Hey man im josh (talk) 20:03, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I am nominating this for featured list because it follows fairly closely to the level of detail and information on another featured list, List of Green Bay Packers in the Pro Football Hall of Fame. Hey man im josh (talk) 20:03, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Oppose per crition 3c. This list of people is already at Detroit_Lions#Pro_Football_Hall_of_Famers and List of Pro Football Hall of Fame inductees, which is sortable by team. While compared to the former this list also has the overall career beyond those with the Lions and the pro bowls, those could be easily added there, with no need for a separate page. The Packers list also largely duplicates Green_Bay_Packers#Pro_Football_Hall_of_Fame_members and could be merged as well; there's a reason until you made this there were only four lists of this type. Reywas92Talk 21:14, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for for your response. On the one hand, you're right, a stripped down version is already included at Detroit_Lions#Pro_Football_Hall_of_Famers. On the other hand, I personally like to see the accolades of those who made it to the hall of fame from a specific team and the additional details that can be included that are not already in the List of Pro Football Hall of Fame inductees page. I acknowledge what I like may not be the same as what others like, but I do believe there is a case that can be made for the usefulness of this article when compared to the other two lists. People like to learn more about their team, and a dedicated page about their guys is something a lot of them like to read more about. Based on some feedback I've received I have work to do, but I hope you'll at least consider it if I flush this page out further. Please be blunt and let me know if you think it won't be worth re-nominating, even after improvements. Hey man im josh (talk) 16:17, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I do not think this same list of people should be listed three times, and all of these lists should be merged/redirected with further data fitting fine in the main page. However I'm not the only reviewer so if others have positive feedback I'll be glad to see this improved. Reywas92Talk 00:36, 29 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for for your response. On the one hand, you're right, a stripped down version is already included at Detroit_Lions#Pro_Football_Hall_of_Famers. On the other hand, I personally like to see the accolades of those who made it to the hall of fame from a specific team and the additional details that can be included that are not already in the List of Pro Football Hall of Fame inductees page. I acknowledge what I like may not be the same as what others like, but I do believe there is a case that can be made for the usefulness of this article when compared to the other two lists. People like to learn more about their team, and a dedicated page about their guys is something a lot of them like to read more about. Based on some feedback I've received I have work to do, but I hope you'll at least consider it if I flush this page out further. Please be blunt and let me know if you think it won't be worth re-nominating, even after improvements. Hey man im josh (talk) 16:17, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments (ec with the above)
- Opening sentence is very weird, starting with "The team" as if the subject had already been introduced. Find a way to reword.
- Done
- Refs go after punctuation, not before, also there shouldn't be a space between the punctuation and the ref
- Sorry, could you clarify this for me? Are you referring to reference 2, which is in the middle of a sentence?
- Seems to have been resolved..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:17, 29 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Lions organization is [....] and compete" - singular/plural disagreement
- Done
- "The franchise has won 4 NFL championships." - write the number as a word
- Done
- The lead generally feels very thin, there must surely be more to say. The lead on the Green Bay list linked above is far longer.
- "Dick "Night Train" Lane, a defensive back who played 6 seasons for the Lions" => "Dick "Night Train" Lane, a defensive back who played six seasons for the Lions"
- Done
- Running back isn't one word
- Done - You're right, I should have realized that was just a redirect going to the main page.
- In the Doak Walker caption, the & should be written as a word
- Done
- Names should sort based on surname, not forename
- "All-Pros" heading needs some sort of explanation (or at the very least a wikilink to somewhere appropriate) as I for one haven't got a clue what it means
- Done
- Same for "Pro Bowls", whatever that is
- Done
- Dashes in the career span column are different to those in the next column
- Done
- All the notes are, frankly, redundant. The table clearly shows that Culp played for 14 years, only two of which were with Detroit. There really is no need for a footnote to say that he only spent a minor portion of his career with Detroit.
- You don't need to link to List of Pro Football Hall of Fame inductees in two different places
- Done
- In the refs you show the same publisher three different ways - "ProFootballHOF.com. NFL Enterprises.", just "www.profootballhof.com" and "Pro Football Hall of Fame". Pick one and use it throughout.
- All images need alt text
- That's what I got -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:21, 26 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
You gave a lot of great feedback. I appreciate it. I marked a lot of them as done and the rest of them I'll work on further when I get a chance. Hey man im josh (talk) 16:17, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- @Hey man im josh: - just wondering.....are you still working on this? Some of the points I raised approximately a month ago are still outstanding....... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:40, 26 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi @ChrisTheDude:, you made a lot of great points that I genuinely appreciated. In all honesty, I am not at this point in time. It's something I hope to come back to at some point but I realized there was just so much work that needed to be done that I felt it better to come back to later on, when I've become better at editing on Wikipedia. One of the big things was the accessibility. Hey man im josh (talk) 14:05, 27 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Tables need captions, which allow screen reader software to jump straight to named tables without having to read out all of the text before it each time. Visual captions can be added by putting
|+ caption_text
as the first line of the table code; if that caption would duplicate a nearby section header, you can make it screen-reader-only by putting|+ {{sronly|caption_text}}
instead. - Tables need column scopes for all column header cells, which in combination with row scopes lets screen reader software accurately determine and read out the headers for each cell of a data table. Column scopes can be added by adding
!scope=col
to each header cell, e.g.!|Classbecomes!scope=col | Class. - Tables need row scopes on the "primary" column for each row, which in combination with column scopes lets screen reader software accurately determine and read out the headers for each cell of a data table. Row scopes can be added by adding
!scope=row
to each primary cell, e.g.| style=" color:white;" | 1963becomes!scope=row style="color:white;" | 1963. - Please see MOS:DTAB for example table code if this isn't clear. --PresN 03:42, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the feedback. I hadn't considered accessibility before your post. Hey man im josh (talk) 16:17, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Oppose per Reywas92. This list adds not much beyond what is already in the main Lions article. If we had some context for each of those listed in the table, and some explanation as to how they got in in their career to get them elevated to the HoF, then it'd be different. Right now, it's nothing beyond what's in the main article. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:09, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Closing as archived, multiple unaddressed opposes. --PresN 14:43, 12 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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