Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Testosterone and violent crime

Improving on last year's chapter

Hi,

Really interesting topic you've taken on!!

I've had a look at the 2023 attempt and feel there is plenty room for improvement. After reading the old chapter, my advice would be to knock-down and rebuild the structure. There's a massive chunk of unnecessary information regarding definitions of 'Violent Crime'. Obviously, a definition should be set. However, 779 words dedicated to such a definition is overkill.

Additionally, I'd recommend seeking further resources and including references throughout the chapter. In text citation is sorely neglected by the 2023 version.

Anyway, best of luck! I'm sure you'll do a great job :)

u3188383 U3188383 (discuss • contribs) 12:05, 30 July 2024 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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1. Title The title and sub-title are correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Love the use of questions Could perhaps be simplified (e.g., don't need future directions of research section) Adopt closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box with an image at the start of this section A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended I prefer the headings to the focus questions 4. Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Good balance of theory and research Move references to reference list and use citations in main body Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited The figure caption(s) provide(s) a clear, appropriately detailed description that is meaningfully connected with the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text 6. Learning feature Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies) Excellent use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good At least one relevant systematic review and/or meta-analysis has been identified For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation 8. Resources See also Excellent External links Promising Move academic sources into references and cite in the chapter 9. User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. A link to the book chapter is provided 10. Social contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence. This was explained in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:12, 19 August 2024 (UTC)