Talk:Aptostichus barackobamai

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grungaloo (talk · contribs) 03:23, 8 January 2024 (UTC)

Hi Etriusus, I'm going to take this review on. I should have some comments for you in a few days, I'll ping you again when I'm finished! grungaloo (talk) 03:23, 8 January 2024 (UTC)

Hi Etriusus, I'm all finished. This is another great article, only a few issues to be addressed. I have some comments about some of the prose, and the lead needs a bit more in it. Let me know once you've had a chance to take a look and let me know if you have any questions. Thanks! grungaloo (talk) 02:09, 9 January 2024 (UTC)

@Grungaloo:, that should be everything. Thanks for the review!! 🏵️Etrius ( Us) 04:22, 10 January 2024 (UTC)

It all looks great, thanks! I'm happy to promote this article. Thanks for all your work on this, and congrats on another GA! grungaloo (talk) 20:34, 10 January 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   See comments Issues addressed

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

   Available references check out, scientific papers have relevant information. Plagiarism not detected, no OR.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Very limited sources, but good coverage of those sources. Appropriate amount of detail.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   Meets NPOV

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   Only recent revert was to fix vandalism, no indication of edit warring.

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Images are appropriately captioned and licensed.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Pass

Comments

• I did some minor copyediting, mostly missing commas or words. Feel free to doublecheck my edits.

Thanks!!!

• Lead should include a brief description of what it looks like, maybe add a bit more about the behavior or breeding, and something about their habitat/microhabitat.

 Done added a sentence about appearance, and another about breeding.

• LiveScience source is a bit questionable - given what it's being used to cite it's fine, but I have seen some questionable pseudo-science content on there. You might be able to use the original Bond paper for that citation since it gives the species names and who they're named after.

 Done, I added the original paper to the citation but left the LiveScience citation in as well since it's more direct.

• "Aptostichus barackobamai is a species of trapdoor spider located in the Euctenizidea family." - Drop located, sounds odd in reference to taxonomic families.

 Done, its a bad habit of mine

• " A. barackobamai was one of 33 new species of the genus Aptostichus described in Bond's paper, and many of the other members of the Aptostichus genus are named after famous individuals." - The second clause could be simplified to something like "may of which are also named after famous individuals".

 Done

• "Aptostichus barackobamai is one of many species named after Barack Obama, and the species is also known as the Barack Obama trapdoor spider." - The second clause could drop the species since that's repeating whats in the primary clause.

 Done

• "A. barackobamai was likely the first member of this species group to diverge following the uplift of the Transverse Ranges approximately 5 million years ago, " - Specify Transverse Ranges in California - the location hasn't been mentioned in this section.

 Done

• "backed up by assessment of 403 loci" - backed up by sounds off, try saying along with an instead.

 Done

• "Breeding season occurs during the winter months, and spiders may go longer periods of time without feeding to better camouflage themselves." - Are these two clauses related? It's not clear why going without feeding is related to breeding. This could be rewritten so the connection is clearer - or separated to two sentences if they're not.

 Done

• "Due to the wide range and abundance of A. barackobamai's population, the species is not considered to be a threatened species, overall" - Drop species, overall from the end of the sentence.

 Done

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