Talk:The Software Toolworks
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Cleanup
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Thanks to the editors who separated this page from Mindscape.
A little more cleanup would be helpful.
In the Mindscape article, under Acquisition by Toolworks, the second paragraph (except for the last sentence) should be moved before the last paragraph of this article. Cleaning it up and providing context:
"In 1990, Toolworks developed the Miracle Piano Teaching System, and held one last Mindscape/Toolworks Summer Consumer Electronics Show party where Dudley Moore introduced the product. However, the company almost sank after it over-ordered the piano hardware for Miracle Piano Teaching System, was not able to sell through copies of the product very quickly into an economy battered by the First Gulf War, and was stuck with a large inventory."
Declined There is no heading titled "Acquisition by Toolworks".
Then, in Mindscape under Subsequent History, the first paragraph, except for the last sentence (Lego Island) is redundant and should be deleted, and the second and third paragraphs belong in this article since they predate the 1994 renaming of Toolworks to Mindscape.
Declined There is no heading titled "Subsequent History".
The last word in this article, "Mindscape," should be a reference to the Mindscape article, and needs a period added after, or better, "which see for the subsequent history of the company." Bilofsky (talk) 23:08, 11 November 2017 (UTC)
Declined This request is unclear. If by "reference" you mean adding a Wikilink to the word Mindscape, please clarify which Mindscape the Wikilink should point to. There are currently several in Wikipedia. Spintendo ᔦᔭ 13:16, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
Edit request December 4, 2017
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I suggest that the last sentence in the article be replaced by:
That October it adopted the name Mindscape[1], which see for the subsequent history of the company.
Bilofsky (talk) 15:59, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
References
- ^ "Top of Mind". Billboard (November 12, 1994): 90.
The sentence as it now reads says "In May 1994 Toolworks was purchased by Pearson PLC for $503 million. That October it adopted the name Mindscape."
My question asks, to what does it refer to?
Companies that are purchased become the property of their purchaser, and as property, they usually do not alter aspects of themselves independent of whichever company purchased them. When SBC bought AT&T, the name was changed to AT&T, but this change happened at the behest of the purchasing company — in that case — SBC.
As the sentence now reads, it implies that Pearson, after purchasing Toolworks, changed their name to Mindscape. As far as I can tell, Pearson is still known as Pearson.
Please advise.
Spintendo ᔦᔭ 22:02, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
Good point. "It" should have referred to Toolworks.
Suggestion:
"In May 1994 Pearson PLC purchased Toolworks for $503 million. That October it adopted the name Mindscape."
and/or replace "it" by "Toolworks". Bilofsky (talk) 23:26, 4 December 2017 (UTC)
Implemented Spintendo ᔦᔭ 02:43, 5 December 2017 (UTC)